>>144479
You're right! Must've overlooked that while editing the line several times.

>>144480
>mak-ETH mine-HEART to-MELT like-WAX
I actually do read it like this though... is there a degree of subjectivity in meter depending how people read things then? I've liked that line since I wrote it so I am hesitant to change it unless it seems very flawed.

I'm gonna record myself reading it to see if it sounds the same out loud as it does in my head. And if I'm not too repulsed by the sound of my own voice I'll post a vocaroo.